Is this a good title and beginning to my story?

Very amazing man, and just skim over this comment because I have an awesome idea for you to get started with this. I am a writer, and I use a href="http://www.wattpad.com" rel="nofollow"http://www.wattpad.com/a to upload my stories. Its a free website were you can upload a book, chapter by chapter, or the whole story. People can check out your book, comment, star and rate. Its the perfect beginning website, and this story, sounds very amazing, post it there, and maybe you can start going even further. Hope this helps!